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Author Note

26th May 2018, 2:46 PM edit | delete

Might be doing 1 page a week for 3 weeks, I'm almost out of buffer and about to be really busy



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26th May 2018, 2:54 PM edit | delete | reply

Did he just possess his own brother?


26th May 2018, 3:20 PM edit | delete | reply

In my story notes I call it 'forcing a vision' ;)


26th May 2018, 4:55 PM edit | delete | reply

Hmmmm you just keep making things more complicated so I can't pinpoint a logical path in all this...I love it >:)

On a side note...what does "take the mick" mean? In the US "mick" is a derogatory term for an Irish person but I don't think that's what it means here?


26th May 2018, 5:01 PM edit | delete | reply

Ya, I'm very worried it's too confusing :S

Taking the mickey, taking the piss... uhh mocking? More like making a mockery of, I guess.


26th May 2018, 5:07 PM edit | delete | reply

Nah it's a good level of confusion, just solid enough for you to grasp but not enough for me to guess. (or maybe I'm just slow? XD)


26th May 2018, 8:00 PM edit | delete | reply

Huh. If you hadn't said anything, Moth, I would've assumed that 'taking the mike' was in reference to a microphone mike. As in someone was going to make an announcement/speech/confession and Jerry 'took the (probably metaphorical) mike'. Like how Dylan and Chris were victims of Jerry's selfish antics, it appeared to me that Corey wasn't exempt from his behavior.

But with that note cleared up, I, again, got nothing on what exactly they were fighting over.

That said, Jerry's, Beth's, and what's-his-face's are oddly composed for something that broke Jerry and Corey's friendship. And considering Beth is on good terms with both Jerry and Corey, it makes me think whatever happened wasn't huge huge.

As an aside, Jerry saying he doesn't need Corey parallels Dylan chronologically later saying he doesn't need Corey to protect him. That really had to sting and likely explains why Corey kicked the bus stop on the next page.

I concur with Proxy, this story is the good kind of confusing. For instance, one particularly confusing moment was when Dylan and Dapper Jerry took that impromptu trip to the abandoned blue building, Dylan was as confused as we were. Because of that, It felt like a deliberate artistic choice rather than improperly explaining the mechanics; an invoked reaction in the reader rather than a failure as a magician.

I really enjoyed Jerry's transition near the bottom of the page. It was a good choice having him transition from his memory design to his ghost design while watching his emotions shift as quickly from shock, to confusion, to rage.

As for the last two panels. I love how you periodically remind us that Dylan and Jerry are not nice people. Most characters in this part of the arc would've probably had an epiphany of some sort by now. It's honestly kinda refreshing to see this play out this way.


26th May 2018, 9:31 PM edit | delete | reply

Maybe Beth and Justin don't know what they're arguing about, just that it's probably stupid. Well! Now that Dylan's worked out what he can do, he might be going back in for the rest of the memory ;)

Yes yes, Corey really gets it rough in this story :¬D

And thanks! No epiphanies for MY characters! if they come to any changes of heart it's gonna be slow and painful >:)



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